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•Cist•M• 02-27-03 08:58 PM

birth of absence
 
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... yeah... madd is back? never left? fuck... i guess your mother never told you... damn

i took a shit and looked at it cuz shit never happened|
too much kids with their titanic craps instead of rappin'|
-its entrapment tryin' act a skit in life that you ain't havin'|
look at him speak, look at him preach, he ill? naw he stagnant|
he's a fag magnet trapped in the head of an addict|
whose world is made of plastic, thinkin' he's part of the dragnet|
yeah, his mind is absent, has a dream but he'll never have it|
never grab it, never stab it in the back if it laughs at him|
but he's you! who would of imagined such a tale|
-of a frale mama's boy who could fathom action but never act it|
always sellin' his rhymes to get outta poverty and the attic|
his only property was a pen and a pad, his education was slackin'|
constantly packin', thinkin' tomorrow that the end was gonna happen|
but that was the past, today there ain't a stadium that he hasn't rapped in|


key... just now i think? yeah... peace

MeNTiLL 02-28-03 09:23 AM

Damn man.....Ill shit right here.....Brings pleasure back into readin' Open Mic pieces.....There was a while when Open Mic was gettin' wac drops.....But it's buildin' up again....

But anyway.....Hot verse here man....Nice rhymin'....Flow.....

~of a frale mama's boy who could fathom action but never act it~
^Nice line man....
~but that was the past, today there ain't a stadium that he hasn't rapped in~
^Ill shit....
~look at him speak, look at him preach, he ill? naw he stagnant~

I was feelin' those lines in here.....Keep it up man....And get at me.....Peace....

NaustiC 02-28-03 12:20 PM

This Was A Dope Drop .. Kinda Short, You Grabbed My Attention After The First 2 Bars

Nice Vocab And Flow


pZ

lastpoet703 02-28-03 12:57 PM

This was a strong piece. The best writers dont force it. which you dont.
favorite line
i took a shit and looked at it cuz shit never happened|

MicDareall 02-28-03 01:57 PM

DDAMMMMnnnnn kid....i come back and didnt see any shit posted up from THE MP and almost cried....haha....nice shit madd ...still droppin the skill....peace

Alias-C 02-28-03 02:28 PM

shoud have made it longer... cause you was flowing nicely here, then just stopped...
Yo to me the first half was ill, no doubt, one rhyme after the other in almost perfect rhythm... and a strong vocab... then it slumped a bit, still nice but not like the first half...
Nice drop man... I was feeling it...

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•Cist•M• 03-01-03 06:14 PM

ha, thanks, i just slowed the pace because i wanted to end it, i didn't wanna key a damn page so yeah... thanks for the feedback and YUP! theMP be back-

peace

uppin'

The 13th Apostles 03-02-03 12:43 AM

Tight shit, just wish it was bit longer....

Flow was on point, as was vocab...just work on the length, but for a key...shit was straight fire....

Keep Elevatin...

P.e.a.c.e.

Dirty Shanks 03-02-03 01:59 AM

Nice drop Madd, I enjoyed this read for-sures. iLL topic and how you flipped it was nice. On-Point flow, and ya keep it straight through-out tha verse. Short and to tha point, nice key dawg. Drop more and I'll be sure and peep.

as for another battle... yes, tomarrow I'll set up another one. I don't like to DQ kats, but you did not make it in tha time that you said you was. I had already dropped mine so it was wasted. Goes both ways, DQ's suck... THAT was not a pre-written, I did that shit in about 20 minutes, right after you replied to my bitch Slap.

Peace, props, and respect.....


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