>> Love Piece <<
 

Yo this is just a little piece I wrote for ma gyal (Lady Silky)

You came around and rescued me from my torture/
You are my baby, i would never abort ya/
Love to be anywhere with you, hug an kiss you/
When you was in america all I did was miss you/(She was on holiday)
I love you, you make my humble heart fly/
With out you id probalbly crumble an die/
But ill stand strong, as long as your with me/
Cuz strength, love, hope, an curage is what you give me/
You are my everything, my future, my world/
In my eyes you shine like a beutiful pearl/
You are my destiny, finaly see theres truth in the world/
The perfect reciepe for me to live happily, is to keep you as my girl/
Ever since i found you/
My life circles around you...

Lemme kno wat u think

idunno...i really wasn't feel'n this much...no offense, but it's cuz you hardly elaborated ya statements....you told how ya felt... but no elaboration...only like on one bar did you elaborate.........but whatever...atleast you portrayed your emotions of how you feel for her...


and ummm...gyal...i think you mean gal...idunno....whatever...

Thanks for that feedback I appricate it, I'm gald it was honest cause other wise I wudn't kno wat to improve but in this case it's the whole thing... but y'all shud kno that was ma first go a poetry so bwoy I dunt mind the critizum.