DETONATA vs. IVERSON03
 

you can explain rules detonata

no need for the rules now,
the new voting poll stuffs here.
Just match my lines, let them vote,
Its that simple!

while your paying sluts, i'll be getting sex for free while laying cuts
cuz your verses resemble your sig - simple and not saying much
i could pull out a knife, Take A Stab At It, get u mad son,
sure, Life's A Bitch - which is why you dont have one!
this dudes insane, beating me? Blah! i got what you lack,
i gave ya girl a 69, and really did a Number on that ass!
punching this hoe, your wack kid - this is just another win
your best chance is if i Make A Mistake, like ya mother did!
smothered him, i might as well half ass this verse and key...
fat bastard - prolly run outta bvreath while Chasing His Dreams
fuck this shit - IVE WON <---there's ya forecast
closest chance you got to gettin signed is ya four- casts
since your wack, im keystylin, you'll start cryin n bitchin
for you to Save Face would require butterfly stitches

Detonata, you repeat your raps like a broken record
Just like in NASCAR, this race is over, there bringing out the checkered
Just like the CIA ill kill you 7 times before you blink
You act like your a gangsta, bitch you aint nothin but a chink
You shouldnt even be here, is this some kind of joke
See because when i was doin your mom, somethin happened, and the condemn broke
And you talk about my sig, why does your sig say punchline
Cause you dont got any, get real, bitch your raps dont even rhyme
So you gave my girl a 69, did your girl tell you what we did
heres a hint, in 9 months she'll have a baby, but it wont be your kid
Give it up dawg, because keystylin is oviously not your thing
You'd be better off meeting Ja Rule, andhave him teach you how to sing
So add a loss to your record, because this battle is done
Your just another little bitch, and im the new #1

this was my first battle, so an people give me feedback on what i need to improve on and what i did good??

i can help if you like:

feeding off my verse, like...flipping my lines back against me -
thats seen as weak in a text battle, so steer away from that aspect in the future.

You were quite good with the punches, but dont start them all like
"Just like in...//
Just like the...//

try to switch it up.
you'll get better though

thanks

lmao @ Detonata recycling lines from his rnr battles

lol
im like whatever, whats the point writing new shit for RB herbs?!

uppin for votes

Detonata, I ain't trying to hate, but u recycling. My vote automatically goes to Iverson dude. Either way it went, I was feeling him better. His punches were more to my liking. It had mad flow. both of your verses was hott.

But recycling gets u nowhere.

Vote=Iverson

Detonata, you ohh me a battle afta this. U know why.

thanks finesse on actully commenting on what you liked about the battle. Most people just say..... _____won, thats cool, but its nice to see someone say what they liked about the battle.

yo iverson go on ur sn: peteypablo00

uppin for votes

uppin