my life
 

YO, you know me/
Tony D, ill pull through
to be the greatest MC
that you all want me to be/

In school, kids tryin to bring me pain/
but im wipin these kids out of my view like rain/
leavin the biggest stain/

my flow will run through you for days/
hotter than the suns rays/
just lookin for ways/
To make a buck, like I dont give a Fu**/

Tryin to take a bite out this rap game/
Not lookin for fame/
I'm out, peace.

lol

p.diddy called and he say's he wants his verse back

what r u talkin about what verse?

lol what im tryna say is this shit sounded like sumtin puffy would say its very weak how bout goin to the forum intitled wackness emergancy and ask for some help no offense but its the truth

pz bro

it was aight, kinda weak though

damm... this shit needs work man, this like a simple keystyle...

I wasn't feeling this at all man... simple rhymes, weak wordplay, elementary vocabulary... lol... ah man, I can go on and on...
Yo I think you should go to that forum my man was talking bout... and just keep practicing here, read other peoples stuff, see all the different style being used... eventually you'll find your own...

Peace

:eek: embarrassin'

Very simple, not much of a point, work on a concept for your stuff, and up your vocab, lookin for more of ya stuff... holla