"All I Need" (My First Time)
 

Yo, before I had experience in rhymin, I dropped a couple of verses. This was like my 3rd verse I did when I first started rhymin, so it aint really good, RATE, DON'T HATE!!

Hook:
Yo, All I need is for haters to stop hatin
All I need is for papers to stop lyin
All I need is for these niggaz to hear what Im statin
All I need is for these pussies to stop cryin

All I need is for these rapers to stop rapin
All I need is for my niggaz to stop dyin
All I need is these cops to stop negro hatin
All I need is for my people to start CLIMBIN

Verse 1:
All I need is for life to change, A miracle to exceed its range,
Take control and contain the pain
All I need is for these cops to stop bustin the niggaz
who be trustin in the government, who's nation is rustin
Like an old bike my mamma gave me before she died
She took the state of a hustler who couldn't survive
Cuz America can't take care of its own American lives
Who tried to exceed in life, instead lose their own lives
All I want is for life to be the way that it was
Before Adam and Eve ate the apple and lost God's trust
Before the water we drink started to turn into puss
Before niggaz who have kids started to teach them to cuss
All I need is for hustlers to stop cryin, busters to stop tryin
The government to stop lyin and acknowledge that niggaz is tryin
All I need is for houses to stop burnin, parents to start concernin
Scientists to stop learnin, let life keep on yearnin

Yo,yo,

Hook:
Yo, All I need is for haters to stop hatin
All I need is for papers to stop lyin
All I need is for these niggaz to hear what Im statin
All I need is for these pussies to stop cryin

All I need is for these rapers to stop rapin
All I need is for my niggaz to stop dyin
All I need is these cops to stop negro hatin
All I need is for my people to start CLIMBIN


Verse 2:
Yo, all I need is for teachers to stop preachin
Take a break, Learn the real meanin of teachin
How much can it take, to change the world from evil to good
Make the world the way that we should, Not promisin we could
How can we stop the hatred against us
The burnin fire death keeps conquerin within us
Will it ever stop, Like the rotation of the world
Temptations of a girl, Breathin down your neck
Which causes you to hurl
Some niggaz say no, Some niggaz say yea
Some niggaz say maybe, some niggaz don't care
Some niggaz be scared, when the cops come, they runnin
But with the temptations of a hoe, them niggaz be frontin
Who's to say they scared, who's to say they frontin
What do I know, Im just a nigga rappin somethin

Yo, Yo
Hook:
Yo, All I need is for haters to stop hatin
All I need is for papers to stop lyin
All I need is for these niggaz to hear what Im statin
All I need is for these pussies to stop cryin

All I need is for these rapers to stop rapin
All I need is for my niggaz to stop dyin
All I need is these cops to stop negro hatin
All I need is for my people to start CLIMBIN


Verse 3:
Yo, all I need is for the Rap game to be more hardcore
Niggaz slackin on love, it's startin to bore
Women bringin in lust, We losin out boyz trust
They gettin caught up in the rush, Callin for their niggaz
When the cops gottem trapped
No mind to be in a life where the cops gottem tapped
Where the prisons stay locked, niggaz gettin dropped
while they smokin their pot, Givin it all they got
Balla's losin their scholarship over dumb bullcrap
Proved a thug wrong, now their body gettin clapped
Mothers bringin in some money, tryin to step out the projects
Figurin on the logic of leavin all of that bad sex
Leavin the drugs and gangs and thugs
And children joinin wit gangs tryin to be an O-G thug
Im walkin by a kin, can't get a simple hug
Without a nigga in ya face, consequences of usin drugs
All I need is for more doors to open for the black Community
Niggaz tryin to believe without the help of an O-G

Yo, Yo
Hook:
Yo, All I need is for haters to stop hatin
All I need is for papers to stop lyin
All I need is for these niggaz to hear what Im statin
All I need is for these pussies to stop cryin

All I need is for these rapers to stop rapin
All I need is for my niggaz to stop dyin
All I need is these cops to stop negro hatin
All I need is for my people to start CLIMBIN



YO, RATE, DON'T HATE, AND KEEP IN MIND, THIS WAS LIKE MY 3RD DROP WHEN I STARTED RHYMIN, SO IT NOT EXACTLY ILL MATERIAL, BUT FOR A ROOKIE, I THINK THIS IS HOT........ACTUALLY, THIS IS KINDA IN THE ILL LEVEL AT SOME PARTS TO ME.

ALL U NEED IS NEW FUCKING HOBBY cuz rappin aint it.....go collect hot wheels....or stamps something you'll never fail at...lol u wack bitch stay out of Raw's Open Mic




Work on it....MC SHITTY



Peace....
1............


Ps: I DONT RATE BITCH.....I HATE.....but only on wack shit...

booooooooooo

That was ill bro.

not really feelin' it, if that was your old stuff, before you was 'experienced', you should drop some new stuff. try droppin' just one verse instead of a whole track - you'll get more replies

"My 2 Cents..."
 

Yo son, was this your first time writin? or just your first time on Rb? Either way dunny, nice drop....you need to elevate your vocab, you used to many words twice...and your wordplay needs a little improvement...but just those two things, the rest you've pretty much got..

Stay spittin.....

P.e.a.c.e.






P.S. Raw...chill out son, if you're so much better than these cats, then help 'em out son...don't make 'em feel like shit...feel me...

It was my 3rd drop in my who life. I have been droppin new stuff in rapworlds.com Ill start droppin somethin new in here too.


Thanx fo' da feedback


Peace

thats alright... i cant hate it cause man i gotta be one of the weakest emcees on here... but from my point of view... work on your rhyming and stop throwin the word "niggaz" around too much man, it was invented to put black people down