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wisdometernal 03-03-03 01:28 PM

Blood flushed in Water
 
You brought misery more than one can handle on their own
on entering the world you released your pain and oppressed them both who gave you life leaving me alone
depressed and helpless making threats to eliminate the ones who also gave me the blessing of breathing air
love is not shared equally as i am the only one to see
the agony i suffer tremendously 'cause there's noone who really seems to care
flood the only space i retreat to escape chains and cuffs that hold me imprisoned in my own torment
crying to myself and my spiritual creator, "give me the words i'll need to preach making me almighty and important"
written as if i was writing the gospel, i pick what i know will mean the most to those who read
my one brother who i never grew to love, was the one who gave me the worst of all sinful deeds. . . GREED

I want my parents for myself but it's too LATE.

THE DARK SENSEI 03-03-03 11:44 PM

^^this was nice, I liked it Kinda reflects some shit that reflects stuff happenin right now

wisdometernal 03-05-03 11:08 AM

it would be nice to hear from others. . .
thanks to DARKSENSEI

varentao 03-06-03 11:31 AM

Another interesting piece..

...cryptic in a way...which to me, usually shows a lot of personal depth...and this had plenty of it. And fusing that with such fantastic imagery and an 'on the edge' kind of structure and overall writing...gave it even more more power...

really liked this...you're a poet who aint afraid to do his own thing...conformity comes second, if not anywhere at all to your emotions and way of writing...

...respect...

wisdometernal 03-08-03 10:48 AM

thanks to my Critics so far
respect to VArentao


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