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For You
~Talkin~
I Wanna Be With You But Im Unsure Of Myself I Know You Love Me Even Broke But Im Unsure Of Tha Wealth I Could Sell Anything Easily But I Could Get Caught And Wed Never Be Together So Im Questionin Myself I Wanna Be With You Forever Is It Worth It Would It Really Be Love Then... You Know Im Educated Enough To Get Tha Schoolin But That I Really Wanna Do Music Just Believe That Ill Do It..... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I Cant Promise You A Life Of Sunshine Riches Or Wealth Or An Easy Pathway Through Changes Growin Older But I Really Wish You Would Help... Through It All I Can Promise All My Hearts Devotion And A Smile To Chase Away Your Tears Im Down To Be Tha Man That You Go With People Can Talk All They Want They Dont Know Shit... Im Picturin A Love Thats Ever True And Glowin Souls Intertwined A Hand To Hold In Yours Through Each Tomorrow Will You Follow... I Will Along This Path To A Better Future Ill Be Succesful You Wont Be Tha Wife Of A Loser Never That For Tha Life Of Me Thats Somethin That Id Never Get Used Ta.... Your Beautiful...And I Wanna Make You Happy Slap Me If I Shouldnt Treat You Better Like Last Man Couldnt... Ill Awake From This Dream As Great As It Seems You'll See A Switch From Peaceful Nigga To Crazy Even Though I Go On Actin Like Nothin Phase Me ANd It Aint What It Seems Im Feelin Your Style And Energy.... Happy Your Into Me Just Dont Fuck With My Enemies If Your Feelin Sick Ill Serve As Your Remedy Prove I Got Plans And Direction To Be Together Were Destined I Dont Mind Answerin Questions Over Kids Love Being Married And Sexin As Of Now Im Alone Upin This House Kinda Depressed When My Homiez Want Me To Get Out You Exlemplify A Perfect Reason To Rhyme Keep In Mind Ima Dreamer Myself Visualising Us Together This Could Be Love Forever Cant Believe Im Even Sayin These Words I Gotta Be Changing Lets Turn Tha Pages Pushin On Through Tha Stormy Weather If You Read All This..Thank You Forrealz ~Content~ |
You Actually Like Her Like That?
you never do anything like this..
its long but worth reading... hope shes worth it cause you deserve someone like that in your life homie just remember those you grew up with and where you came from..peace |
Thanks Much...Really Dosent Seem Like Somethin
Id Do But We All Go Through Changes And What Not I Know I Have Its All About Gettin Your Mind Right But Still Watchin Your Back N Front So You Dont Get Sidetracked Regardin All Aspects Of Life... ~Content~ |
Raw...and full of emotions...
...once more, it had a lot of personal depth to it...i felt the whole 'theme' of this piece....vocab was used to good effect, if not at times hindered by lack of structure... ...what i mean by that is the basic structure...the way you place your lines makes it hard to read, and disrupts the flow for the reader...i think it's also the style of writing it is...but mainly just the way it is layed out.... ...all in all, was still a very good piece, which i quite liked..but a bit hard to read and getting a good flow to... ...respect... PS You were once Contenflo, weren't you? Personally think that sounds better, and is more subtle giving it a strong meaning, than Content Flowz, just a personal opinion though.... |
pssst...darneck...you blew my cover...zoikes...sike
It Says That But I Like Content After Goin Through A Buncha Names But I Hate When People Say How It Sounds Rather Than How I Say It..I Dont Gotta Big head Or Nothin I Aint Shit... Thank You For Actually Replyin To This Seriously Homie Thank Ya Very Much ~Content~ |
I liked the raw setting that this piece brought out, but the whole letting your emotions go, is a road that has been ventured out too much upon. It's nice when there is a curve ball thrown in the mix of the style, but this was not that sorta piece. Emotion wise it was straight to the point, nothing really stood out to me besides that fact. Imagery was to an extent non-existant, not saying that there was none, but was minimal. Strucutre wise it was decent, I would have liked to have seen a bit more of a break up into stanzas, but this was nice, it might have given the piece less of an apperance of one that went on forever.
but like I said it was a nice piece, just not expanded into other realms that doesn't really entise the reader... Quote:
Nice emotion, just carry out an extention of that and try maybe speaking from a metaphorical sense, that helps alot in these piece, nice though... love... |
then again if you dig harder into the piece every line does have meaning and flows nicely, just how you percive it, but I feel you, thanks..
Your Words Girl ^^^ Imagery Is Alright But These Are My Feelings For Someone I Care About And Even More Because Of Somethiing Bad That Happened..I DontFeel Like Sugarcoating My Speech Even Though Many Think Thats Unique Thanks For Replyin |
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Peace fam...
could mos def feel your emotions up in that... ima sucker for the reality kinda poem lol "...I Cant Promise You A Life Of Sunshine Riches Or Wealth Or An Easy Pathway..." I hear you kid, can relate myself... Peace |
i dont think you really read it
all but i dont care either.. thanks for replyin homie..peace |
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that was tight man. it was so emotional and in touch with youre aspiration of love...nice bro. you deserve that for your life.
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Thanks Much Man..We All Gotta Get Our Lives Together Though
I Hope You Make Things Happen In School Homie And I Hope Some Music Gets Done In The Future...Im Beig Pulled In Every Directon Right Now Though In Regards To What I Shoulda Done Should Be Doing A Wanna Do..Thanks For Replyin |
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