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•Cist•M• 03-05-03 12:27 AM

;the box called Nowhere;
 
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The more i breathe the less i see you being alive :|
i hate myself, i degrade myself, i die inside :|
i love you too much to let you live, hurry, bite the cyanide :|
i'm high on life's high on death, there is no heaven, only the hollow steps :|
swallow that breath, wipe that tear, soon there will be no one left :|
you're blind to the blind's eyes whose sky is the brightest of them all :|
you admit you can't stand judgment, yet those you condemned seldom fall :|
and i crawl, 100% individual and zero gall, i hope you're happy :|
what i can do is real, what you did was false, what will be can't be :|
attack me, hand me my broken heart, leave me in the end :|
i'm satisfied with nothing, nothing satisfies no one, be my friend? :|
be my death, be the gun, lead my end, bleed my friend... bleed! :|
you'll love the sweet transcending of hate but i need a friend... please?! :|
i'm on my knees begging your god to let you free, don't cry :|
i've sacrificed all my youthful years to see your eyes :|
but somehow we're not good enough for this life... we lived in angst :|
if not the pill, at least pull the trigger, to you i give thanks :|
you bite, i collapse, we die and no one cares :|
roses fall, sympathy talks... welcome to the box called Nowhere. :|

inspired by a lot of Kurt Cobain info, Nirvana CDs and tapes... plus how i feel...

peace

self 03-05-03 12:30 AM

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TiK says: just cause your a super mod dont mean you can be a dick, especially to other word perfect members, add a real reply or prepare to be messed with. mwahaha... ok i got nothin but ill tell on you... haha, just fix it up self, thanks.

lmao! I know, I was going to edit it, I'm talking with "SYSTEM" on aim right now. LoL,

This was truely, amazing, and hits home for me. I really liked this,

"you're blind to the blind's eyes whose sky is the brightest of them all :|"
That was....Amazing. My favourite line out of this all. Damn...and true...

Really liked this, always making me think and stuff, its good for me, lol

*Replied* :D

varentao 03-06-03 08:42 AM

This is kind of heavy...

...had a complexity to it...and a brilliant personal depth...

...hard hitting, use of vocab was parallel to the theme and style of the piece...

...and imagery was vivid and striking...had real power to it...at times even very raw....


....respect..

Calisto 03-08-03 06:00 PM

I liked this peice... it had peircing usage of the vocab, the rhythm was very well distributed throughout this peice and I was feeling the depth of it... I think you're an amazing poet

X Ecution 03-09-03 01:04 AM

very very insightful piece i enjoyed it very much i think the whole perspective was amazing and verall your poetic talent on this piece was phenominal keep it up...holla bak 1

•Cist•M• 03-10-03 01:48 PM

appreciated

•Cist•M• 03-12-03 12:46 AM

*would like to appreciate more-cough*


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