The Silent Warrior
 

The Silent Warrior

Strong and proud, however never loud,
battlin and strugglin, too many things to be jugglin,
by the way of peace we hopin shit cease.
The silent one sittin there all by himself, nobody knows his shit's straight off the top shelf,
the quite ones round town, may come and steal your crown, don't underestimate, u cats should never hate,
there's too much of that shit, some kids should learn to quit,
come listen to me spit,
elaborate your mind, become the lovin kind,
just like the silent one, who knows how things are done.

He aint no wannabe, y'all all about to see,
that this cat got skillz, he don't own no 100 dollar bills,
coz he's a starting man, livin life without a plan,
takin things as they come, aint gonna be dumb,
gonna stick to the guns, still not forgetting to have funs,
workin out shit right, keepin his rhymes tight,
takin shit down to the bone, most of the time feelin really alone, doin this shit as a one man show, when any cat test him, he gonna make them blow,
this dogg will never stop reachin, he'll never cease preachin, fightin for cred, gettin hoes into bed,
things start to work out, he be winnin the bout,
that is life, stayin out of strife,
makin some dough with his superior flow,
this cat is becomin a sensation, his name be spread across the whole damn nation,
but the kid stay quiet, never break a riot,
coz he's a modest man, evryone becomin his fan,
warrior battles on, to claim his name as the don,
not by his own mouth, but his doggs from the South,
throwin up his name, claimin his fame,
as the number one cat that spit all the thrillz, that don be MEADSKILLZ!!!!

Now how does this shit flow? I need some feedback from y'all, don't be sleepin on me here!

I KNOW YA'LL CANT SLEEP ON THIS ONE.... that was dope, where'd you pull that one from.... keep rhymin!!

i gota say.. that shit had flow, that shit was perfection almost.. just starting out, this cat is goin far !!
keep that shit up !!

But Enough About Me...

Keep rhymin dogg.
You show promise like your homeboy inspire.
Try work with the layout too, that'll make it easyer for cats to hear your flow...

Like the line:
Strong and proud, however never loud, battlin and strugglin, too many things to be jugglin,

Try like:

Strong and proud, however never loud
Battlin and strugglin, too many things to be jugglin

Nah mean?
Respect though - keep spittin.

Yo Low Key, yeah thanks dogg, me and inspire be layin it down in here haha, yeah thanx for the advice man, sounds reasonable, I know what your sayin, I'll take it on board, thanx bruther, peace.

Yo Doggs, I'm lookin for some advice up in here, I want replies, whether it be advice, criticism or praise, praise especially, its all welcome...^^^^ Don't be sleepin on me here bruthers, Peace out!