daily writings
 

i need to sit down, im exasperated
frustrated with shit now i need to masquerade it
fuck reality im out on my own
its all a scam to me, let the truth be known
im out for myself lookin out for my health
and ill worsin yours at the sound of the bell
dont get in the way of an anger uncaged
dont stand in the presence of this speed train engaged
runnin you down with smooth vocals un chained
my style is untamed and raw to the foundation
uncomparable to flows youd hear on a radio station
i play more notes than a casio creation
with a hundred modifications built to suit your imagination
i cross more lines than iraq with a new map
and missles teamed with yasser arafat
a new era in flows unleashed on foes like moses to pharoahs
only few compare ta the show i put on like micheal solo
waitin on a battle that can deserves to be named
ill take it on the strret phone or your mainframe

this verse was alright, but i mised the rhyme in some places, and it just seems like your throwing out challanges, tight piece over all though, keep writing....

i liked it... gotta love this one
"a new era in flows unleashed on foes like moses to pharoahs
only few compare ta the show i put on like micheal solo"
but you do need to sorta work on the rhymes, some of it seemed "filler"... overall it was good...
keep rhymin

YEAH THANKS FOR THE CRITIQUE... I WAS THINKIN THE SAME THING

i play more notes than a casio creation
with a hundred modifications built to suit your imagination

i liked this line...it stimulated my 7th sense...

the only thing that mad this wack was that it had no topic...

but for just random spitting this shit is hot... entertaining indeed.
flow was on point...verse was well structured...it flows perfectly in my mind..

so i give you a thumbs up...nice drop.