Through My Life
 

Surviving in the streets everyday was my only mission/
Trying not to become another dead victim in hell's kitchen/
Always hanging with somebody who is known for snitching/
My mother bitching about why I wasn't born a christian/
Cutting class so I can get a girl who wanted to penetrate/
Every nigga in school was treating me like a renegade/
The principal was wathcing me like a enemy of the state/
Eyes was full of jealousy and envy when he looked me in the face/
Playing basketball everyday after I was drinking on some liquor/
Go to the body with a nigga,bang him out so his lips can quiver/
Fought other crews,stomped them out until their spine shiver/
Had them throwing up blood when my fist was in their liver/
Smoking weed everyday like it was daily ritutal/
Don't go to chruch on sunday,so that means i'm not that spirtutal/
When my mother delivered me people said it was a miracle/
Now everywhere I go i'm causing more danger than myistkal/

Uppin for repplies.

Bad topic to do but every1 starts off rapping about this for starters, sex weed n runnin from cops, least u didnt have a nine in yer pants :)

"Fighting almost everyday until I became very spritutal/
Now all the girls thinking me and homies gets very physical/" -"very" - need to work on the vocab, vocab's what makes a peice.

"I never falled in love" - falled? Check ur grammar. "fell"

"My main doggs are taken out of this earth,now I was feeling hurt/
Their spirits is my only gift,and my anger will be my only curse/" I think u switched tenses (past to present back to past)aswell, "are" then "was".

Keep writtin tho, elevate.

I changed the verse a jay.Uppin for repplies.

Uppin for repplies.

not bad but that Gangsta Shoot Um Up Die Slow Shit... is played man... your structure wasnt bad but you should try going with a more complicated rhyme pattern and lace is with more multi's

and dont just UP your shit.... Reply on other drops too!!

Thankz rich NI,but I didn't mention shooting somebody on this
piece dogg.Uppin for repplies.

that was aight, good for a gangster rap... but yeah thug styles are getting old man, post more replies on other peoples rhymes and you might get more in return... everyone sleeps in this joint unless you're friends with them... keep rhymin