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incoragable 03-07-03 04:21 PM

one day
 
one day
i found a dog
so i took him home
and killed him with love

one day
i found a cat
so i took him hoom
no hes microwaved, and left on the mat

one day
i found a midget
so i took him home
than i killed him with dick hits

one day
i found a old man
so i took him home
now hes dead choked on a can

incoragable 03-08-03 01:04 AM

i cannot believe nobody likes this

varentao 03-10-03 06:33 PM

Even though i dig deep into this...in between the words n lines....i'd get a fairly meaning that has a certain amount of power to it...

..to me, this was pointless almost...blunt n bland...like you were just writing shite that was coming into your mind...

..i mean you could've been trying to make a seroius point, but to me it doesn't seem so....i gave you the benefit of the doubt in your other piece, which was actually good...

...and if you were trying to make a seroius point, it was done in a blunt and bland way...and that combined with my perception that this was actually a cynically piss-take of a piece...doesnt do anything for me..

..i choose not to read into it and fully capture a meaning it has, but i think wasn't your intention to encrypt....

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