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the rythm projects around the next sound, reflects a complex, higher dialect sound, the 4 elements, a natural source projected daily thru the sound of catastrophical force, im feelin no remorse, cuz this games a racecourse, makin niggaz parents wanna get a divorce, u feelin the vibe, i know im killin u just by the look in yo eyes, u feelin me right, cuz the shit that i write, and the shit i recite, is like the fire to the gas, nigga it'll ignite, i feel so much compassion, the scope of an assassin, yo belt u betta fasten, cuz the shit that i was blastin, show aint nuttin happenin, there is no competition, no state of transition, my mind is on my ryhme,you will fall into submission, a state of dilation, total annihilation, ur ryhmes is time takin, mad with no intention, its war im declaratin, a man on a mission, stuck in desperation, with just one dedication, to kill u, and ur whole damn crew, yes, to kill you, and ur whole damn crew, im makin statues of u on ur avenue havin !
a barbecue dis is just a preview of what im gonna do to u.......


i know its short but shit....

this was ight.. kinda played vocab but you made it sound pretty hot...

it was well structured...flowed nicely in my head..

what made this kinda wack..is that it had no direction... no topic for you to rhyme to... it was just a bunch of rhymes thrown in one big bowl...

other than that it was ight.

i dont know man i was just writin it down and i was totally just throwing shit together... ill be back though cause i aint done... i got some shit i gotta say

Yeh i agree wit G. Ya had no real topic so it wuz jus a bunch of rhymes rumbled 2getha.But u got a good vocab,use it to ya advantage.Stay ^
-Avi

I thought the vocab at the start was hot, but it startrd to fall apart around the fourth line, I'm not sure why, I think it was the sound switching.. I picked up on somethin' like that, not really sure tho... uppin' it still