a broke mans frustration
 

i know i can be what i wanna be,
be b boys and girls listen up
anything you wanna be in this world is set up
and rigged and controlled by the hip
some corporate exec waitin to bust your lip
im here, to show, the truth about these bitches
and how everything you do was done with switches
buttons and movements in society
are controlled by a constant major rivalry
between truth and youth and president bush pocket book
oil companies off the hook, gougin prices without a look
you can shout a book and no one would notice a crook
why am i strugglin for comfort while some fuck is in lumber
50 acre lot in ready for a long winter slumber
woods and nothing around a million dollar estate
and my daughters the one thatll be shifting me through probate
probably collecting nothing after i escape,
enter through the white safer gates
and shes lifting through paper weights
paying for college with funds made from a table
servin coffee while some fat cats livin fables
story book fantasies you and i can only dream of
so i say lets team up, scheme up
and kill these fuck with their own tea cups

aight kidd let's see what we have here...



Seems like you have that Nas joint flowing through your vains here, I won't comment on the comparison, just what I see here as if I haven't heard of the guy. The intro was good, you came out smooth, but at times cats don't carry that out and switch it up in the piece and at times can be a problem, basic rhymes at times ie. hip and lip, there are other words out there that can make your piece stand out and the flow twice as much acceptible.



The flow to your piece is nice, it can be done to any bouncy stutter type of beat, again the lack of orignial rhyme scheme is a bit of a disappointment, again with...bitches, switches, book, look, almost too elementary kidd, that did throw me off when I read through this piece, a bit too basic for me.



lack of internals lost that flow that I was feelin', the bars just seemed to go and fall off and not really make a dent as they normally should do, a nice piece, could use some work to make a bit better, addition of internals and more complex rhyme patterns, nice attmept kidd...

love...