wrote this a while back
 

i change the climate to 500 degreez
i'm in lyrical fitness, i could rip an MC with ease
steppin to this is like havin the trigga squeeze
at close range, you could alter the past but the outcome wont' change
i'll erase ya face and have ya face rearranged
burnin anyones lipz just by sayin my name
i could battle AND 1 and still have betta game
cause i be throwin flames, like Elway passin burnin logs
i'm Slammin wannabes so i might as well be turnin pogs
you need help when you rap like a body builer needs creatine
my rhymes decapitate biter like they were a guillotine
so fuck a hater, i'll be quick to slice his throat
TKO a cat and straight take his right to boast


that's all i remember. anyway, tell me what you think...

it was kinda basic overall.. lacked creativity.. at some parts dragged..

"i'll erase ya face and have ya face rearranged"


like that line... kinda gay... but it flowed right.. todays music industry you could be rich with just a good beat...

Aight kidd, I dunno what good this is going to do cause it was a while back and you could have elevated from then, if not then this should help, I think...



The intro to the piece was not that attention grasping, the rhyme structure was too plain, this can be improved with internals, this line too did not really make this piece as good as it could be...

"i'll erase ya face and have ya face rearranged"

I mean to use the same word twice in a verse is aight if used correctly, in the same bar? It just doesn't work well.



Haha the last two lines were aight, they are probably the brighter moments in this piece, the other two did nice in presenting what was to be expected next, flow could be improved, but did it's job.



The ending was not as hard hitting as an ending should be, nice, but didn't leave me thinking more about the piece. The flow was decent, a very decent piece here kidd, could be improved in certain areas that I pointed out, keep elevating kidd..

love...

ya that one line was suppose to be i'll erase ya face and have ya brain rearranged. hey thanks for the feedback. check out my other on(i think its on the second page called, "the process of writin this rhyme) to see some more creativity. i'm just tryin to mess around with a few different types of styles so yea...