nine eleven 9-11 ( dope shit tribute )
 

all the heartbreaks and tears,
from the crisis causing trembles and fears,
no forgiveness, nor forgets after all these years,
children losing their classmate peers,
adults with families losing their careers,
everyone involved slowly disappeares,
just before the plane was about to crash,
and leave the city in a piled up smash,
as the plane went through the one of the towers,
people dead passing through the hours,
everyone affected showed their respect by donating flowers,
the amount of tears dropped, were like raining showers,
what about the planes soaring up in the skies?
people not even getting to say their goodbyes,
after the first plane hit, the whole world starts to sigh,
not for the sake of being scared to fly,
this is the tragedy that occured on the 11th.

no one not expecting the worst,
its about to come and its only the second verse,
a second plane soared and hit the second tower,
only within about half an hour,
about all of N.Y city lost all its power,
the cries were doubled causing more than a shower,
the fireman tried to put out the fire,
they worked non-stop using their fully entire,
strength, with desperate measures reaching this length,
so many bodies dead, barely even a single sivivor,
the 2nd towers dropped 22 floors, and the whole city trembled,
squashing innocent lives, they died and crumbled,
as the ground floor felt the shakes and rumbled,
now the death pile had more than doubled,
and innocent loved ones losing their beloved,

in total their was about 3000 innocent lives,
from two planes causing all of them to die,
so much grief, causing a depression,
in everyones hearts they went to heaven,
this will never be forgotten, it will always be remembered,
the tragedy that occured on the 9th of September.

do you drink some potion where it makes you rhyme better everyday?? just wondering... keep rhymin

haha thanks for the praise inspire, more knowledge flows through my mind everyday (",) .. please everyone reply to his who views it, i dont mind if its critism, advice or praise.. praise is good though, but just tell me if this shits dope..
peace out...

Zzzzzzz..........

i thought this was pretty well put together man

i could feel the emotion in it

maybe the flow was off in some places???????????????????????

that was ill in the poetic form a little but one correction the 9th was the month it happened on the 11th

theres alot wrong wit this....like the whole thing....the flow= off ....
makin sense=NO....this shit is boring and makes no sense most the time threw it....dont rhyme jus to rhyme make sense ignorant ass.......jus to make one point of it not makin sense.....how r people donatin flowers before u even talk bout the second plane hittin....this is jus stupid

ok, Dareall.. i seriously appreciate the critism, i admit ur critism isnt just about shit, SOME your points are true..
one request, show me somethin better if u think u can...
just to see if u know wat ur on about.
peace out... p.s lookin foward to seein ur post

MicDarreal= Faggit, there is such thing as criticism man, but then there is such thing as hatin, u mutha fucken sucka, don't belong on rb if yo talkin yoself up like this, stop thinkin this is yo domain and think bout what u say befo you lay it down!

Peace Out!!!! (To those that it belongs to!)

By the way, Unifire, yo shit was good, maybe, there was a little wrong with it, but overall, yo rhymed well, talked about a real subject and kept it close to everyone!

Peace Out!!!!

thanks for all the replies n critisms.. so just wonderin
only if ur up for it .. Mic Dareall.. u wana battle on front lines??
drop somethin first and give me a reply if u wana battle..
peace out...

HAHAHA.....i see that Uni is the only one to reply to your shit mead so u got to dickryde him....its cool.....but realize when someones got skill i say it and when shits weak i say it......any problems wit that .......then take it to bitch slapp and call me out yall......fuck it how bout a handicapp match.....u 2 vs me.....ten lines from each of u and 20 from me....holla back faggots

i gotta question is Micdarell known for fuckin with ni99az like that. He act like a internet nympho o some shit man

nah im known for lettin people know when they suck....check out emcee juggernauts open mic....i gave him a positive reply cuz hes got skill........but to lame asses like yall....ill tell u your weak cuz u r

Where is yo pieces Darreal, show me them, If I think they be good, I'll be givin u cred, but if u runnin yo mouth without provin yourself then u can get your ass up on outta here, I aint never seen anything of yours ever in open mic...................

Peace Out!!!!