NeW WorLD DiS-OrdER
 

yo im resurectin the next creed of emcees/
who blow enough to rock trees ta no leaves
flowin to be da ill supreme of all rhyme schemes/
from simple thoughts to playin in wide screen dreams
drill through the surface to realease da true ill skills/
droppin corpses of fake emcees in hilled land fills
leavin earth the roamin land of the hectic and majestic/
no room left for da fake and domestic
we havin all angles covered like a quadraseptic plan/
for the fake types nuttin but pain, scorn and disdain
for emcees dat wanna tatse der'd be ample to sample/
meltin skillz inta tracks like dey was burnt off a candle


>aint done<

Yo dawg, this flows nicely, rhymin is sick, pleny a multi's and that, you show good skills and I reckon it'll be better once u finish it.
Keep it up dawg!

Peace Out!!!!

I didnt think much to this at all, lacked interest and eye catching lines, elevate....

nice wordplay ok vocab weak similies

revise, it has life

this was aight start, elevate abit and when its complete might be a pretty good piece.. lookin to see ur finished work..
peace out...