"Better Dayz" - Y'all can't sleep on this one!
 

Better Dayz

They came, they saw, they went, as they said,
Ventured to lands that many said was dead,
All members of adventure in search of the ultimate paradise,
Visions of layin on the beach, sippin gin and juice, rockin on ice,
These people in search of the closest thing to heaven,
One man set out to wipe away memories of 9 - Eleven,
His aim to this quest to find a Utopia while on Earth,
Then to meet all his foes on the other side, in a rebirth,
A land of beautiful women, food and booze to no demise,
No buildings here in the form of a high rise,
No war, Clean Air, Choice of Religion and Freedom of Speech,
Pussy on offer, fresh and tasty like a peach.

No man could refuse such a place of pure life,
No reason to steal, no reason to kill, even the meanest man, be stayin outta strife,
Hatrid, is all gonna be a thing of the past,
But when we all arive here, the flag will be at half mast,
This Utopia that lies in the search, can be found between Earth and Heaven,
Too many cats reachin this place when they too young, little kids at the age of Seven,
The quest for this Bliss be our whole lives we spend on Earth,
And the Utopia we are looking for comes when we enter our rebirth,
From the time we leave this World, on our way to a higher place,
You can forget about the time, when there was difference between race,
Lets hope just yet that we can make our time in our quest the best in can be,
Knowin in the back of our mind that later, we will all be free,
Live life to the full, stay true to the game, and don't do wrong in our ways,
Coz if we stick to these laws, we will all see better dayz!!

Now this was cool an i dont mean it as in a geeky way i mean it was chilled out to read n i had a real chilled out beat on that i spat it to, dope verses, good word-play nice vocab overall this is tite.....

dope shit

trippy! i was totaly in to this piece....and all that shit you said got me dreaming.....now im kinda like...."aww man". but keep it up dude! your shit is tight!

real tight. i liked it

it had a good concept.. personally I wasn't into it, but the rhyme itself and the flow, wordplay, creativity etc... was actually very good compared to most here.. uppin' it.. why not..

yo, nice concept.
i was feelin it all way through up till the last couple lines though...seemed familiar, but yo, tight piece...

These people in search of the closest thing to heaven,
One man set out to wipe away memories of 9 - Eleven,

Feelin this.
Stay up !