words don't express..
 

wrote this one tym hopefully it'll get some helpful crits.

my feelings for you strong, so un percieved
you're that light on the flame hidden so deep..
without u im weak, honey my heart feels so lonely
i wish you could swim in my sea and see what i see..
believe.. you're what i breathe
what im here for, what i wake for each day..
promise me you'll stay and never betray
your ways are engraved, on my heart a tattoo..
physically and mentally ill show love for you
hold me in your arms, emotionlly subdued..
never confused never cold nor used
without you i'm help-less almost incomplete
as if i were a jigsaw u'd be my last piece..

words can't express what you mean to me.
these words can't express what you mean to me...

this wasnt bad..seems like words id
like hearin from my girl...
it all flows alright but better read slowly
to me but its your poem girl...

not bad...check "for you" vvv

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