Help me out I'm new
 

With more money than your savings and loan
Stay off the throne
You don't wanna sit in the hot seat
I leave you laid out like reinforced concrete
Better yet I'll walk all over you
This ain't a real rhyme this just something that I'm working through
Got you cats throwing it up like a stomach flu

^^^first off, if u need help, post a REAL rhyme, anyone could of wrote that, its simple and short....write about a Topic, or sumthing so u could really be Critiqued

tru
thanks

yeah must agree there... at least post maybe 1 long or 2 shot verses... dont like write a whole song or nothing... and write it on a topic... but from reading that up there... it rhymes but its overly simple... i mean this reply is almost longer than it... keep rhymin

yeah nice start, true to wat every1 else is sayin, u gota write on a topic n you'll get more replies on praise, critism, advice on ur rhymes, some good lines, just elevate more with vocab, flow was aight.. keep spittin..
peace out...