Typestyle Freestyle (Yo I'm new rate me I need all the support I can Get)
 

I come in from the streets, headphones blarin,
Put me on a mic my color you won't be carin.
Cuz you'll be witnessing rap as it should be done,
Raw, real, and above all else fun.
Yea I'm new to the game but I'm willing to learn,
And by the time I'm done you'll be feeling the fucking burn!
It's finally my turn, my time in the spotlight,
I'll make you run home to Momma and say goodnight.
What you wanna fight?
I'll be flying you like a kite.
Cuz I'm on a mission to be above the rest,
No matter who fucks with me or puts me to the test.
Yo, you want me go back to the gym,
Cuz right now you be skinnier than Lil Kim.
You got no chance against me, I am the real deal.
The only thing left to say is this rap is sealed. Pe@cE

Not really feeling it. I think some multis will help a lot. Some punchlines will help too. A lot of the lines were boring and kind of corny....




Keep practicing, hopefully you'll elevate a bit.

yeah i agree,
okay, you got attitude and a lil flow, but try to be more creative with you lines...

not a bad start though...keep workin.

peace.

thanx for respondin guys, and keep em comin. I'm tryin to get a few good raps out before I decide to battle anyone, so if I'm not heard from 4 a while you'll know why. But ya def. havent heard the last of me

bitch you suck!!

always nice to meet a fan :-P

you dot need support..believe in yourself homie
and practcin only makes yo better...
rhyme against yourself in tha mirror
or rhyme about what your doing daily
or what your wearin itll step your flow up
a lil eventually

~Content~

Word, Ill keep that in mind Content.

fuck support, people are always gonna tell you you suck.. get over it, your rhyme was pure elementary, no punches, no multis, no comparisons except the kite thing and that was wack.. you need to seriously elevate, if you're really try'n to make somethin' outta this lack of skill you need to practice every day, when you're walkin' down the street freestyle to yourself, at friends houses freestyle to music an' shit, at party's at school, at work (that's where I am) it's gotta consume your every thought.. every emotion has to be a rhyme..