lightening house
 

I think this would be best fit in this section.


feeble minds can make the best of all designs---
relating those scriptures to more recent time lines--
his ability and power felt driven to the heart--and yet he stands there with consent that his fathers fake intent drove'm apart--It was a start of a new beginning--dealt with sin far within worn out veins to a paper thin--I make a miracle you've made much more--congratulating the prosperity of his validity based on his triumphant score--my throat turns sore as if this lightening house could pass away and drive the past on the straight track to a clarity train- is it vanity-built through out my preface to make words seem more valuable to attain a better surface--aspired by the lightening house im uncontrollable to a human mind--thoughts twist so fast that the days in my life never last--lasted for a second now im back to the start—break free from a wish list to find a broken heart


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nice poem good use of vocab...keep it up holla bak 1

fix ya structure...n you woulda had somethin nice....ya vocab was mos def coo...and the theme wasnt that bad either...

holla

one...hunnet

word-- thanks for all of them

uppin for some more input---word