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nigga I'm from the northside
my side of Houston Texas
home of gettin yo ass whupped and comin off yo watch and necklace
we boyds nun in this bitch we here for the better
keep bumpin ya fuckin gums and get hit with the beretta
want some come get some
its all good in the wood
on tidwell oh-well nigga thats yo brains on the hood
you shouldnt talk so much shit nigga
we'll run up quick
cuz niggaz real desperate
they walk around with them bricks
thats where im from nigga
NAWF side in this bitch
cuz when the north meets the south its gon get durty and shit

it really didn't flow too good... a'ight as far as an early attempt goes... you need to work on some more complex longer bars, maybe some punches, multis would really help ya style too..

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i was feelin this. just throwing up your hood cant be bad. in spots where u had the 2nd bar to complete the hook did give this peice a choppy flow. try making it hook after the end of every bar. exzample is the first 2 bars can be put into 1, ya know. return the favor.

peace