*To my name* a mans viewpoint
 

And I ran with freedom far behind--
Set the pages of that life and all the risks i left aside--
i did it this time and theres no turning back--
felt the rythm of the scream and all my dreams turned black--
destination at a stand point ran through my mind while the meditation was distinct due to the cost of lost time
I finished it though but did i think my thoughts clearly--
was I intended to embark on a claim i held dearly--
To my name--
And for yours the same--
with shadows in every step and the pride i sought with depth---
I held true to my name---yet with sympathy
blessed to the other brother who lost it--
let it be know that his action equaled to the cost of it--

for most of it ya flow was nice and well ya topic aight. but ya vocab was simple ya jus need to up it but witout affectin ya flow cos ya got that sorted. not bad and id like to hear more. anyway check mine not on my name (war) hit me up wit a reply. l8r cuz

My vocabulary is determined by the story told--I usually elaborate with deep intellect but i felt this guy had nothing to say but what was there in front of him. Quick and to the point-- i guess its a verse of reassurance really


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