a short rhyme
 

so what i do is not permitted like goal tendin in ball playin
when i spit from cans in any direction im all sprayin
holdin the chrome rustoleum while yall be parlayin
think i might as well be def cuz i aint hearin what yall sayin
too many people try to fit in whatever you do dont sweat
they cop anything from a promotion as long as theres one on the shelf left
kids that cant stop mimicking others they havent found themselves yet
i drag ink on sheets to further notice my pens stress
i got my self on lock like being made with a bench press
got sorta confused between this straight jacket and a tight vest
three eyes open at all times to realize how my life rests
i dont write enough so imma write till i feel i should write less
thoughts have come and gone, if you theiving then you were never here in the first place
bats and sports bags used for more than just robbing first base
forget that politicing i just wanna get open and rhyme
i love it like cops love patrollin hopin for crime.....

tell me what you think please ssome feedback i know its short but anyways good lookin out

Yo dogg, some aiight rhymes, much better than yo last posts, you had good lines and multis, yo need to work on vocab a little but if u apply all of these skills to writin on a real subject, it will be good...

Peace Out Yo!!!!

i'll rap this shit like food... mash you like potatoes/make your moms pussy more redder then fresh tomatoes/im leaving you choked unless you show me what u got/this lil nigga is chocking more than when he sucks his dads cock/come on kid, your the worst rapper in ya block/i don't got a laser gun, but my rhymes will stun ya/you couldn't be a shocking rapper even if you were hit with thunder/you typing shit and you still stutter/to speak the truth... oh well you come from the gutter/w/e the fuck you are you must be half IRANIAN cause i did fuck ya mother/ j/k

aiyyo dumbass you wanna battle lets take it to Bitch Slapped forum dog....

CHILL NIGGA i was just freeing

nah mate you got some good rymes coming on there keep working on them and dont let anyone put you down, coz you can be as good as anyone else here... stich

calm down people... umm yeah in this post it was feeling it on/off... it was ok but i agree with meadskillz... work on it... keep rhymin