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Jstylez 03-24-03 12:52 AM

Harsh Thoughts
 
Lil short but i hope you enjoy........


You every feel so fuckin mad you could just strangle a person to death and look in there fuckin eyez why u doing with out any regret......if you have........YOU FUCKIN CRAZY....lol....straight LOCO



Hopefully looking forward to your demise
pain left to agonize, to pleasure me with your out-cry's
It gives me pleasure to see you in so much greif
i never like you i alwayz wanted your life-span to be breif
i sigh by not saying good-bye to your final seconds
i cheer as your chest breath shorten and lessing
half of a smile on my face as i pierce your eyes with a grimey look
i pray to satan and thank him for the worthless life he just took
the only thing i question is what took him so long
you shoulda died when you was conceived...along with her mom
your face alone is aggravation in its physical form
i curse the day you was born...when the doctor place you in your mothers arm


Holla back wit sum feedback......

Farenheit 03-24-03 04:33 AM

lol, shawt but sweet....nice drop....

BlUnT-MC 03-24-03 09:43 AM

yea, you should continue this, I was feelin' the anger/ psychotic mood.. flow was there, vocab was there, it was good...

Jstylez 03-24-03 04:17 PM

word...yea i shoulda wrote more...shit woulda been hot....thanx for the feedback tho......uppin fo more

ClearStatic 03-24-03 05:26 PM

pretty deep bro.....
im likin it....

The 13th Apostles 03-24-03 08:24 PM

Could've been better...but nice drop, nonetheless...work on wordplay, end your bars with multisyllable rhymes...it'll sound much better in audio, and look better in text...

8/10

P.e.a.c.e.


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