RapVerse.com Community - "untitled" by Nikki Anderson

RapVerse.com Community (http://community.rapverse.com/index.php)

- Poetic Scriptures (http://community.rapverse.com/forumdisplay.php?f=9)

- - "untitled" by Nikki Anderson (http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=35204)

"untitled" by Nikki Anderson

my home girl wrote this poem..i think it is pretty dope.....drop replies she would appreciate them....

Quote:

Part one
You stole my heart with just one glance
Im lost in your eyes, lost in a trance.
I said nothing and yet he understood
My eyes told him more than any words could.
Like an anchor on a boat in the sea,
pulling me down, the wave of love
is drowning me.
First on my mind, last out of my head
When you touch me like that
Im confused, so misled
Part two
Maybe Ill learn to live without sweet glimpses of you
yet even as i say it, i know it could never be true.
Even if I have to look from far
Memorize your number but never call
think of you but never voice how i feel
its better than nothing at all.
What am i to you? You are everything to me
When Im around you, I have to remind myself to breathe.
Send Cupid away, and his arrows too.
I dont need this and I dont need you.
Dont need the pain, the love with no return
When will love be clear to me, when will i learn

Okay, so this was a love poem...and it was obvious that it came from ya heart n all that....

....and i thought it was nice...even though it maybe was a bit too blunt and bland at times, with some of the vocab being too simple in parts (some of the end parts of the lines)...

...but overall, nice...

....respect...

like i said..my home girl wrote it...she was hella sketchy about it getting posted.....but yo thanx for the feedback