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poem (last written piece by me)
i hate myself. i'm happiest with you. i forever doubt my words, i can believe my thoughts, but will you? i could tell you everything, that i've ever felt, would you really listen, it wouldn't help. i've given up on me, i don't know who i am, i've written all my dreams, i'm going to drop my pen. forgive me if i change, love me no matter what, if i die before i wake, promise to never give up. we have flaws, its probably best we never showed them, this is my eternal hello to you, our poem.
peace |
It was short....But hot...But wat U tryin' to say? U ain't writin' anymore? I hope that's not it....But I liked tha rhymin' in this...And tha emotions could be felt...It was deep....Keep it up...Peace
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thas it, you out... thought you'd go out with a bang man...
Yo this was pretty short, had decent rhymes, a pretty good flow, but you could have made it a bit longer, I was feeling the concept in this, I didn't think there was enough of it though... you for real bout writting no more in this? oh wel.... peace out then.... |
It sucked...:( Cuz it was about you not writing...if it was a joke, then it would be good! But if its real...NO! Damn You! Don't leave! Bastid!
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