lovers quaral
 

I toss I turn
I wait I burn
I complain to life about all its mishaps
I complain to the past and all its recaps
You dont worry for pain is your soul
life has no meaning to you but boring and dull
You love me yet brake my heart
It hurts me to see you part
When you come back the pain is like a home
Lost and dull but never alone
I could deceive my mind to believe I dont care
But I worry no matter how much you care
Its your world your lost in I just want you in mine
Maybe you'll remember my love and change in time
I can conceive you happy and nothing going wrong
but then again who doesn't sing that same old song
magnetic turn tables condense our lovers quaral
Only fate and time can depict our moral

not bad... but you coulda described more of the 'quarel'... but that just me...

not that bad of a poem... i'd give it a 7/10

"I could decieve my mind to believe that I don't care"
^best line...i think.....

keep dropp'n........................................... .........

ty I didn't put much thought into just letting off some steam if you know what I mean...

makes ya think a lil and i hope things dont turn out like this with my relationship but if so il pick up where i left off when i left off

this was alright and simple but worth eadin..peace

~Content~

I though this piece was nice simple not complicated and yea emotions were felt deifinitly....but baby why u putting our love querel on the net..lol am jokin Nice one yo

lol ty ppl

Good venting piece...simply, but well pout...emotions were depicted well enough...


..i think that's enough said....respecto....

Nifty. Totally different than that fifth grade poem of yours. At first I thought this was about the tediousityness of life. (Is 'tediousityness' a word?) But I can see it's more about a pained heart. Both of which I can perfectly understand.

~Shalom~