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kmfrob 03-26-03 09:58 AM

Shinobi life
 
The darkness inside the room blinds my eyes to the truth
The blackness of the situation at hand only tightens the noose
The rain beating hard I understand every last drop
Stop for a second from my task to break into memories from atop
The honing of skills confined me to this world of death
The blood on my hands shows the brutality I posses
Connect with another force into this falling planet
Stabbed forward with eyes closed into the after-world I banish
Thunder awakens the mind I study his mind pattern
The evil standing just down the hall shining red from the lantern
Quiet like a phantom
I traverse behind the pillars towards my final position
In blurred vision I complete the last ever killing of my mission
Thickened blood pours out from the man’s neck
I got feelings deep inside of me but it’s too late to regret
The alarm sounds suddenly everything becomes hectic
I got my sword poised and ready for the next hit
My route is marked I run straight for the stairway
Gunshots whisk past my head no more than a hair away
Unsheathed I decapitate those at close range
Using body as shields I finish those who caused pain
The rain is getting harder I feel myself slipping
The halls drenched in blood and my awareness is missing
After a few seconds I see my chance to escape
The fire exit descends and I aint got not time to waste
When into the streetlights I feel I’m bleeding
Mixed with the cold rain my leg is wreathing
Gleaming I can see the candle calling me back home
Climbing 3 floors and I feel alone
Sit down on the tatami and prepare for my final calling
Bow down in shame to my ancestors my visions falling
See the steel shine this is how it must always end
My stomachs slit open and into sleep I descend
The darkness now feels more welcoming I’m warm
The silence resounds and I’m torn
Everything closes down and I see the truth
It’s just a shame now it’s no use


Aight incase u diddnt clock on this songs bout a ninja. aight hit me up no bullshit ive only read 3 lines of wat ya wrote shit. only proper feedback

BlUnT-MC 03-26-03 10:54 AM

nice piece, flow and vocab were on point, wasn't sure of the topic if any.. that's all I really have to say, stay elevatin'.. peace

*~BaKardii~* 03-26-03 11:19 AM

nice piece pappi keep spittin i like that!!

Tha Linez Drawn 03-26-03 04:33 PM

Good vocab, nice topic...original...Keep it movin'...

kmfrob 03-26-03 06:04 PM

bakardi fuck u u not gettin a response for that bet u diddnt even read the piece. u others aight cool thanx for ya feedback

fgee 03-26-03 06:57 PM

yeah good piece man
liked the flow and vocab told it well

lillem 03-26-03 07:24 PM

Liked it flowed well....Keep that ill shit going....
Check on mine FUCKEN HATERS ..holla

kmfrob 03-26-03 07:49 PM

aight thanx for ya feedback uppin

KRISSKASS 03-26-03 09:07 PM

i like this ryme since i love the shanobi game series.. i could feel on the shanobi life ///

mad props homie

~RuThLEss~ 03-26-03 09:33 PM

Tight vocab yo and all the shit went to the point Nice am just showing some luv back since you peeped my piece Dedication to the Motherland.

Wun

kmfrob 03-27-03 05:40 AM

aight thanx for all ya feedback appreciate it uppin

kmfrob 03-27-03 02:13 PM

uppin

KnightShade 03-27-03 03:00 PM

Nice drop son, you stayed on point, i saw what you were sayin in the piece too, it was great, keep pushin more drops like these.

8/10

Narcicyst 03-27-03 03:36 PM

that was a tight drop...i liked how you created a visual landscape thru words i like that shit in a rhyme...the vocab was nice, the topic was illness and original...

Unsheathed I decapitate those at close range
Using body as shields I finish those who caused pain
The rain is getting harder I feel myself slipping
The halls drenched in blood and my awareness is missing


i like those bars they nice...anyways keep spittin god...one

kmfrob 03-27-03 05:36 PM

uppin


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