Do you know?[Addictions]
 

Ima spill my heart here

Do you know what is like to have the flu all day/
till u drop shit in the bulb and blow it away?/
all your money goes down the drain/
and theres always a constant cloud of rain/
over your head, should you go or stay,/
lock ur self in a closet and block out sun rays/
or get busted then run away/
or to be a ward of the state//
the only thing that calms u down is a pen and pad/
the constent mood swings, hyper, happy then mad//
then sad and noone wantsta be around you/
well i do, you do what ur sposed to//
but theres a hidden secret always in your head//
and noone knows the pain you suffer through//
the constant desire to be dead,//
the ephedrine game, the dope train/
tweak what ever you wanna say//
the only time you stay calm is when your blowin tweeds/
your ned for more methanphetamine is deemed//
an addiction, cuz you cant breathe with out it/
hit the glass till your eyes roll back in your brain//
your mind is sped and you cant think with out it//
u stay up for a month and your body shuts down//
you cant move with out it, it controls your every motion/
its notion, to suck you in to its ocean/
all your ties to outside life broken//
i live in the werst meth state,/
136.7 labs busted everyday//
the crime rate, roberys for the scrill/
so you can steadily kill ur brain away//
i ran away when i was 14, you cant imagine my strife/
now i gotta son and soon to be wife/
that i cant take care of cuz i ruined my life//
my ruined life i want to take every day/
but my sons the only thing that allows my soul to stay/
the sick shows that go on in ur brain/
after a while you start to hallucinate/
no way to rejuvinate /
exept to crawl in bed with no light and sleep 300 days//
then you wake up later and go right back to the geetar/
your heart so fast, you walk and have to take a breather//
you just dont know what is like to watch a bulb fill up with smoke/
or the felling you get when the powder hits the back of ur throat//
the taste, thats the most addicting part/
but dont start be smart //
unless you want the dope flu/
but its hella safer to get a sik person to coff on you//
you dont want it, stick to the tweeds/
unless you wanna wind up and be wound up like me/
a 4 year old son, and your only 19/
ur girl cheats, and u gotta choke niggaz till the cant breathe/
i cant afford a ring to ask her to get married/
cuz all my money goes to methanphetamine//
and your parinoid that everythings a cop/
you drop your shit, then you come back and it gone//
its in someone elses nose, and i get worried//
that a kid got my shit and his lifes ruined too/
and that hell be like me, wont know what the hell to do//
you cant just stop, that shit is "2 liggett 2 quit"/
it dont stop, it goes till ur life come to an end//
wll my life is almost over, and it hasent even begun/
it was a nice run it was filled wit a ton of fun//
but it was ran by a dictator named meth/
ran my life to the end, to my death//
but im begging you not to suffer its wrath/
but its a good thing you dont know any of that/
it meens dope aint got to you yet//
but ill bet, youll get it offered to you maybee not today/
but im warning you stay away, theres nuthin but pain in its wake//
now your warned lets see what you do/
unless your already hooked too//

Fuck...that made me cry.

lol, all true dog, all true

uppin

yea heart felt stuff kid i did really get a sense of ya life just gettin more and more fucked up and ya couldnt do nuttin bout it. as for the rhyme well it was aight. flow was good generally but maybe ya vocab could have been better. still ya got sum proper emotions out in that anyway check mine shinobi life aisht peace cuz

thanx dog, and will do

uppin

uppin fo sum replys peeps, i put my heart in his one

come on now, uppin

Now that I'm not crying I think I'm gunna take a second stab at this. haha I keep coming back to read it so I might as well. First of all, sometimes elaborate vocab means shit. And everyone coming in here to mention how 'simple' it is, should remove their fucking thesaurus from their ass. Honestly, I think over-wording woulda taken away from the honesty and straight up 'THIS IS HOW IT FUCKIN IS' quality of your verse. I saw your life in those words....got a sense of what you feel and how hard it is and....DAMN kid, I wanna come save you my fuckin self. Definately my favorite read of the day.

ps. last time I checked I was still a girl haha

damn yo, you got like the same life as me, only I don't do crystal.. I do way too much E, got a 5 month old son, and I ain't even like my girl anymore... shit dawg, I was feelin' this the whole way thru.. trust I know what it's like.... and as for the rhyme itself, the flow fell at times, but other than that it was like perfect.. I totally agree with deception that longer more complexly-worded bars would've really taken away the heart of the rhyme...

yea i really feel that complex vocab leads attention away from ther feeling of the ryhme, cuz ur ass is just sittin there tryin to pronounce werds then haveta get up and getta fuckin dictionary to read your shit right, fuck that its simple, simplicity is comforatable

hope all that elaborate vocab talk wasnt aimed at me. lol nah i wasnt saying u gotta bring out 5 syllable words if u read wat i say i said that the rhyme was simple but ya got proper emotions out in the piece and thats what matters. re-reading it i get even more visions in my head

I can't sleep on this one

I thought that the flow was off in a couple of places, but I was definately feelin' it
I thought you used some good word play
"unless you wanna wind up and be wound up like me"

Your emotion came through in every line, and that is what makes a stroy, rap, or book grab people's attetion

You've found a great outlet for frustration...Keep spittin'

wow
I cant say anything else that someone else hasn't said except
wow

thanx yall, i relly didnt expect the hype on this one, wow thanx