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UNFADEABLE 03-28-03 11:36 PM

verse for a song...
 
its not quite finished yet but i wanna know what you ppl think...



i'll munipulate ya brain with this intrucate game
no need to explain or attempt to interpret my name
its self explanitory, tight rhymes is mandatory
give me a beat and a mic and i'll be expandin my glory
i'm wanted like crack and some 40s cause my style is addictive
ppl sayin i got the juice like i just pushed over bishop
delivery is delicious while my lyrics are suspicious
one of the few blessed with talent how the hell did i inhibit this?
my sickness has been infinite and my talent is very conspicuous
another MC out rap me? thats ridiculous

what you think? fav line? helpme out ppl

D-Dizzle 03-28-03 11:44 PM

This is aiight, your skill level seem to be up there but this is just standard freestyle, I'm the best rapper, yada..yada type. It seem like you could be nasty if you used that for other subjects to talk about, yaknow. If you gonna use brag rhymes you gotta come like just sic widit. Im just going by the short drop you got here.

UNFADEABLE 03-29-03 11:52 AM

thanks man...anyone else?

C-Section 03-29-03 12:55 PM

i didnt get this part

"ppl sayin i got the juice like i just pushed over bishop
delivery is delicious while my lyrics are suspicious"

it doesnt really make since, and like d dizzle said dont make im the best raps unless your me LOL just kidding, i do the same thing if i dont have topic to write about so i wont hate on you

go read mine " one of my verses" its almost like yours you might like it.....it will show you how your really suposed to brang on your self :D

UNFADEABLE 03-29-03 02:08 PM

ppl sayin i got the juice like i just pushed over bishop....watch the movie juice and you'll get it

delivery is delicious....my delivery is good

while my lyrics are suspicious.....ppl dont think their mine

so yea....thanks for the feedback

~RuThLEss~ 03-29-03 02:13 PM

Yo Nice drop.....yo am just returnin favor since you peep my lil piece......and Nicely Done ....but it mostly is Basics..na'mean....but still Nice.....keep writing

BlUnT-MC 03-29-03 02:42 PM

yea, I was really feelin' the flow.. vocab was pretty nice.. uppin' this shit..

xLogicalProphetx 03-29-03 05:58 PM

this was a nice drop dawg
like the flow
had some nice lines in it
keep em coming

~1~

kmfrob 03-29-03 06:13 PM

this was just standard but nice. it flowed well and ya vocab was nice. YA gotta finish it tho cos u cant really tell off such a short verse. nice tho up till now. check mine Shinobi life return the favour cuz

UNFADEABLE 03-30-03 12:56 AM

thanks, anyone else?


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