tell me what you think
 

see lifes a war
and im a soilder
I thought I told ya
that while your trying to change the globe
im just trying to change my life
with these flows
yall know
im just trying to do whats right
but it aint gonna be easy
and there will be alot of contraversy
so when I enter a battle
im bringing no mersy
me and my homie
are the future superstar emcee's
and we gotta to thank the teachers
for helping us with our vocabulary
but 90% of it comes naturaly
if it wasn't for them I wouldn't be who I be
and I also got to thank my parents
for producing me
or I wouldn't be here today
saying what I have to say
and perminitly putting these rhymes
in your minde
and getting threw to you
kids im talking to you
telling you to stay in school
you want to call me a schoolboy its cool
as long as I know I aint gonna be no fool
and just because no ones calling me a thug
doesn't mean im gonna forget were I came from
so stay on my goodside
don't get on my badside
or you'll get nocked on your backside

work on yo rhymes son

i could tell your new to this.

try making you lines longer and use less me be see rhymes thats wack. and your flow is off threw the whole thing, but keep writing nobody is rakim when they first start

and if you ever want me to reply to yours again you better go reply to mine and other peoples, dont expect feedback if you never leave feedback for anyone else

son u aint even rhymin on a beat kidd no flow son try harder...elevate >>>one<<<