first drop
 

brand new .......felling sick, here goes...
verbal collage deadly barage got words like dupree got wheels in the garage/
times new roman, you know the type
calling me public enemy but don't belive the hype
ink drips like blood as i write
must use wit cause i'm too small to fight
might makes right if you're white but in the wrong spot
skin color got me stuck so feet fail me not
hope i get by quick unheard unseen
these damn streets keep me fast an lean
losin my goddamn mind tryin to stay clean
spend all my time hittin books
gettin looks
from thugs and g's who wanna kill me, make an example
statisically i'm a fuckin sample. trouble is ample
opportunity aint, hope is faint, need a patron saint
"run run little faggot run run"

not bad for ya first drop. ya multis were quite good but ya could made em better wit sum better vocab. flow changed after 2 bars but it worked both times just not together. still not bad for ya first drop. now check mine cuz

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=35519

aight peace

not bad for a first drop. one thing you could improve on is multis, those almost always make a rap sound better, they just help the flow. your vocab was pretty good and the topic was good. keep spittin

uppin

i thought it had awesome flow.....with or without multis....
keep postin bro

uupin

ya its not bad for a first drop
it felt a lil inconsistent but thats
what happens when u just start spittin
but some of the best ideas come from just writtin
and not worry'n bout a set topic, free association

check out my newest drop "Super Hooligan"
peace