one more bfore i go
 

one more time for this week...see ya on the weekend...



collect sentences, altogether venemous/
spittin like a viper, killin all my enemies
carbomb explicatives, explosive verbs to end it with/
pollitical pollution solved with terms indicative
thin line walked and hard rhymes talked/
like a celebrity, celery, stalked
eliptical poeticness egomanical murder mess/
vocab like rehab bust like special agent Ness
writing rhymes easy cause i like to write/
what the fuck does it matter if am damn white?
don't wanna be a shady, em or marshal mathers/
just verbal elastic spastic dangerous to other rappers


hip hop days don't go away
airwaves bangin hits for gays
it's ok
words pave the way
even if no one hears what you got to say

constitution on fire, another liar/
metaphysical politicain policing the pyre
spontinuity long gone commercial/
everythings revamped and dressed up to sell you
by-product buys product hot brand new shit/
clones of rehashed last years hit
broken bottle aristotle livin life full throttle/
in conclusion my contusion was the reason for fusion...


i'm a dork and a geek and fuck you if your not.

sleepers.....

1 word

ILL

this was the best piece of work ive ever seen on open mic well done

right on right on
thnx
ups!!!

WAKE UP SLEEPERS!

ups, c'mon, tell me i suck. or at least somethin!

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.Damn.
 

Your wordplay is mad ill kid. You got a hot flow on your hands here son... keep puttin' them threads out. I'm madly uppin' this joint.

thanks baby

yo ur vocab wuz incredible, wordplay great, metaphores okay
i lyked dis one betta den ya last!

Your vocab was good but hopefully this isn't a finished product. Your hook was longer than your 2nd verse... Killah Kobra... best thing you've seen dropped in Open Mic?... You must not be in here much. I'm the mod of this forum and I couldn't even say 1 particular piece that is above all the rest. This definately isn't one of the best but it's not one of the worst... it's an average to above average piece... instead of focusing on the hook yet learn to write longer verses...

pz

thanx baby. uppin