quick lil verse
 

watch me practice cannalbalism
as i grab the manuel can opener and can open his bosom
then ride a camel to prison and kill all the murder convicts
and leave all the substance abusers astonished
as i spit doper then chronic, and they wonder if i'm on it
i'll rip an MC faster than sonic,
my lyrics are lightyears ahead like star trek
givin ya whiplash like a car wreck
mutalatin ya body to look like carnage
cause ya spit nothin but garbage,interrupt ya verse before you even start it
i'll scalp rappers like indians
puncture there internal organs as i put my knife deep into em



thats just a quick lil drop, tell me what you think....

anyone? c'mon ppl

aight dog, theres always room for elevation, ur flow was alright tho at sometimes sensless ur an alright emcee, letsee ur bst lines:
then ride a camel to prison and kill all the murder convicts
and leave all the substance abusers astonished
as i spit doper then chronic, and they wonder if i'm on it

i liked that, good drop

peep these their stickyickyicky

Do you know [addiction?]
Heart Poured Out

anyone else?

c'mon yall...help me out

hello? is anyone there?

yo is this the one u wanted me to check out ?? well ne ways...

its aight man, but kinda write on a topic, its still a good spit but.. the flow was good, this stuff you can use soughta in frontlines,
if u want replies thats how u get them, and also give real replies ..but u already do that ne way, not just 'that was ill'
keep spittin dogg..
peace out...

Aiight...

This I didn't like. No offense. Just it was really simple, not to mention all the simple similes.

But the fact that you had at least those similes, show's that you've got a good chance to come with some good shit...

Keep on writing dog, gonna see that improvement.

yea....it wasn't that great....just a quick keystyle. thanks for the feedback