Sound of tha pound
 

I write sad rhme to express my life of bad times//
i'm white witha mad mind and i might do bad crimes//
Still with the light im gonna shine//
i used to abuse my mind for crimes//
now i use my mind to find rhymes//
my face is dirty//
this place can't hurt me//
i have grace from heaven//
i aint disgraced in the seven//
only cos i recognize what i was homie//
if u check the lies it will wreck u guys//
i gotta surprise in disguise//
a bless that made me wise//
realize the rest is hard to hide//
i test the the lies to tell the truth//
can u smell the juice//
man u fell in a noose//
u goofs it's raining and u aint got a roof//
lookin threw the eyes of a dyin' breed the cries of the futre look bleak//
i aint cryin' cos i aint weak//
my critical mind doesn't believe in clynical time//
i'm unique with the way i speak//
u weaks just take a seat and stay meek//
i reach when i teach what i preach//
this time my mind isn't wrestlin' with aggression//
i'm comin outta depression with lots of questions//
i'm seein a manfestation of a spritual blessin//
u better have discretion in my lyrical expression//
i'm a white rapper thug ready to fight after love//
i wasn't frightened from the shove//
i was enlightened from above//

yo, what up man...
aight lets see... I thougth this piece was fairly simple, most of the vocab was simple... wordplay was aight, there wasn't too much to the concept... but the flow... that shit stood out here for me, cause you was flowing nicely here, shit had good rhythm man... way better flow then that other one I read from ya...

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Peep this

very simple rhyme and vocab
but Alias-C had a point bout the flow
it was dead on, u had some multi-sylable
rhymin goin on
u can learn better vocab and better topics and such
but it is much harder to learn better flow
and uv'e got it on this one

PS peep my "7 deadly rap"
thx