:: A Soldier's Thoughts ::
 

This is an account of a soldier's last thoughts.....

The countdown has begun, there’s no time to be wasted
When will they face it? War’s the only option, there are no replacements
You can’t escape it; all you can do is turn to God like Mase did
We fight for freedom, the one element greater than anything touched or tasted
So empty your suitcases, we’re gonna make this one for the ages
Saddam, I speak the name with hatred, enough to burn through my rhyme books pages
We conquer in stages, step by step to take back the country for its people
Studying their movements, their brains are transparent and easy to see through
They study me too, The American solider, most invincible and dangerous unit in war
No More bullshit, it’s time for Saddam’s regime to end and be no more
Terror strikes their bodies to the core, half their army is ready to surrender
The chaos is like placing the troops, tanks, and bombs in a blender
My thoughts are rendered; these faggots lied about everything they said
Make their fuckin’ turbans looks like their insides, bloodshot red
Many face their deathbed, projectile rockets of hot lead flying past my head
Instead of duckin’ and runnin’, we say fuck em and gun em until extinction
We all look the same when we’re dead, no need for distinction
My mind’s blinkin’; I know you’re thinkin’, how can a mind blink?
It’s when your mind Sinks in and out of consciousness and you can’t think
A distinct stick, it’s the essence of the rotting dead corpses
The sights morbid, the obscene scene of deceased Iraqi forces
A desert fortress, a place where the desert winds always whistle
Bombs and missiles, heard the footsteps, turned to look down the barrel of a pistol
Within a second, a spark propelled the fatal bullet from the weapon
I never reckoned, that I’d die by the hand of an Iraqi peasant
A death present, I was told to watch my back, I guess I learned my lesson

Uppin...

someone hit the snooze button?

not bad... the flow could use some work but the content and vocab are on point.. topic was constant, couldn't really tell it was a soldier story, but in some places you could... uppin'

thanks for the reply....

blunt mc didnt tap it hard enuff, the flow was consistent wit the vocab, but when you use multies your lines haveta be shorter. yaknow i meen that multies make ur line longer so you gotta moniter the sylable count, 13-16 sylables a line, mine are longer its my style,

good drop, decent scheme and idealism,

thanks for the feedback, I'll work on that

Scarface hit this pretty good with his topic. Everything was pretty much in running order on this piece but minor work could be made to improve this and tweek and tune it to make it better. Line length affects the flow as he said so yea, watch you syllable count. This was a nice piece and I was really feeling the topic since it is going right along with current events... good drop.

pz

IT WAS GOOD.RAPPING ABOUT THE WAR. ALOT OF PEOPLE CANT DO THAT WITHOUT WANDERING TO ANOTHER TOPIC.