Lines
 

MY LINE HAS BEEN DRAWN.
A SWAN IS A SACRED CRETURE THAT LEEDS TO FELINGS OF:
"SHOULD i BEAT HER?"
i FEAR MY SELF AT TIMES AND i SHOULD i 'M THE ONLY ONE WHO KNOWS ME FOR SURE.
i STARE AT A PLANK OF WOOD IN AN APARTMENT THAT LEADS ME TO A STREET CORNER WERE A PERSON ISHUNGOVER OR OVERHUNG WITH GUILT OF INCOMPLETION TO GET A LIFE AND GET THE JOB DONE." STRIFE IS THE DEVILS PLAYGROUND IDAL HANDS JUST HELP HIM PICK UP THE SAND TO TOSS IT ATYOU i'LL PRAY FOR HER AND YOU.

LET ME KNOW.


(IT WAS AN IMPROV PEICE)

This was a decent piece.
my opinions-
1 dont write in caps lock( people get annoyed wid it)
2 try usin more multis
3 devolop a more consistant flow
and last use stronger vocab to get your points across

all in all this was a good piece
the topic was decent