something on my mind
 

i open my gate and what do is see//
a kid stepping up to my plate like he got something against me//
see when this kid steps up to the mic all he brings is hate//
cause see he just got out of the slammer for 7 acounts of rape//
this punk be more like sisqo shaken his ass like it was some bate//
when my mind starts flowen, i suck da rhymes out of you and leave you looken like a shriveled up grape//
while this kid is trying to grow some grass, i have already fertilized his bitches fine ass//
now this white boy anit got no class, cause he walk around like he wearen a black man mask//
most people act like they got cash, while i roll up behind them flash'em my 10G rims and my custimized benz//
ya all people talk about there 20 inc rims, but can hardly afford the 10's that they ins//
when my vocals hit these mics it is considered a sin//
cause i pass this shit through all of my kin//
when they come home late i ask were the fuck you been//
so i close my gate and let the kid think, cause he kinda look rooster dink pink.

:mad:
damn,im sick of the rims and braggin b.s. already.Jus up ya game by rhymin on a actual topic or come harder if u tryna boast to be tha best.Stay ^
-Avi

usally id say flow from thedome, but ima tell u to think about every werd in ur linesur shits wack, 13 sylables a line, 16 at moist, try one instead of sayin what u got, talk about what someone doesnt have, use an imaginary opponet, sum busta off the block na mean?

uppin i want some feed back

feed back needed

uppin

feedback needed? post something worth feeding back to. i dont like the taste of shit. get it?

uppin for some feed back peps plz