.what is life?.
 

i came out through a place i am destined to go in again.
i felt the warmth on my cheek as the blood began to blend.
from my mother to me and me to them and into the docs hands.
my mothers screams were empty except for pain and bland.
my birth was a scam life is the test i dont want to take.
on all of earths lands there is nothing that makes it great.
just greed and hate so with haste i looked into the docs eyes.
and tears erupted my face. as i knew this was the start of life.

years passed but tears always stayed no matter what the age.
and if it wasnt high there was pain involved with every single grade.
slit my wrist with a grass blade in a feeble attempt to escape.
but pain stayed and i was cuffed to this life that i utterly hate.
give me a pound and let me have my weigh tears fall from eiffel.
i was tired of life and also getting dizzy in the twisted cycle.
and unlike you i hate everything for happiness ive tried.
so ive turned to a diseased tree. with my one and only hope to die.

but then i did and realized this sucked worse than life.
my living hell has turned to a dead one and death is out of site.
now i live forever in this burning melting place and all is hate.
filled with pain. you can see skin dripping right off of my face.
why didnt i have faith now its god i hate how could he send me here.
only pain no more fear if only i had seen things more clear.
and today i steer passed the highway to hell and crash into a thorn.
god tell me why. you picked my fucking soul to be born.

nyce shyt kid...nice structure, words flowed together nicely...good topik n spit on it real well..

keep elevatin..

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why didnt i have faith now its god i hate how could he send me here.
only pain no more fear if only i had seen things more clear.
and today i steer passed the highway to hell and crash into a thorn.
god tell me why. you picked my fucking soul to be born.

8/10

thank you for the feedback.

Yeah man, this shit is good, Liked the concept, rhymed throughout, the only flaw in it was just that the flow dropped off in points, but all in all, quality ish, keep it up!!!

Peace Out Yo!!!!

upping.

Ok, .Sand., Let me tell you tha truth because no-one else here will. There are five stages to life:

1. When God created tha souls, he created them all at tha same time. And he placed them in tha heavens, thousands upon thousands of years ago.
2. Then when it was time for you to come to this world he placed your soul in your mothers womb 120 days after conception. There you lived growing for a period of nine months approx.
3. When it was time for you to take this test they call life, you were born into a cruel world where you'll be put through all kinds of tests to see if you truely love God or if you are ungrateful to him. This testing period lasts approx. 76 years, some live longer, some live shorter. Here it matters what you do because it will determine how tha rest of your stages turn out. You are promised one of two rewards that you work for--Paradise or Hell-fire. One is for those who live for God, and One is for those that created mischeif in tha earth, despite God. But no matter what you must take tha test. After that, every soul must taste death.
4. Hence tha grave is tha forth stage. In it you will be interrogated by two angels, they will ask you questions like, "Who is your Lord?...Who is your messenger(prophet)?... What is your book(scripture)?" You will answer according to how you lived your life. Right answers will be rewarded with tha expanse of tha grave, a window open so you can see your place in Paradise, and a cool breeze blowing from Paradise, ect. Wrong answers, however, would result in punishment by the angels, in which they take a large hammer and smash your brains so hard it would come through your fingernails, tha earth will sqeeze your body, and a window will be opened to show you your place in Hell, Which you would feel tha heat from tha fire burning you prematurely. No matter which kind of grave experience you have it'll only last from tha day you die until Judgement Day.
5. Tha last stage is eternal. Death will be brought as a sheep and slaughtered before tha people. Proclaiming no more death and no more hope for an end to your final destination. You will then be made to walk a bridge called Sirat, that is as thin as a hair, that will be placed over tha pit of hell and has Paradise on tha other side. Depending on what you believed in God and how you lived your life, you'll either make it accross and abide in Paradise forever or you'll fall into the pit of Hell abiding there forever. Paradise is real and Hell-fire is real, Both wait for it's inhabitants.
For those that lived life as God had ordained, Pleasure is promised forever. For those that lived life Insubordinate to God, his commandments, and tha teachings of tha prophets; punishment is promised forever. It is up to us in this life to find out tha truth about God, what God wants us to do, and believe and follow what he commands. God says in Tha Holy Qur'an: "I did not create jinn and man except that they should worship Me."
also He did not create this world for play and amusement. You have tha rest of your life to find tha truth, Use it wisely...You are very talented and your skill could be put to better use...PM me if you want more detail...

alright thanks man.

"since im used to the cold i'm able to rest my head on Jesus' shoulder."

^^^^ Loved that segment, nice drop man enjoyed the read!