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listen man
ill make u a missin man
with these bullets from my gun
that i hold in my hand

i said listen man
nigga ill make u a missin
fuckin with my riches
you get snatched up from caravans

now a gave you a warning
but if u aint listen man
ill let these bullets fly
and hit any and evrey man
so u dont stand a chance
you better call your fam
and make up some funeral plans
cuss im out here hustlen
and stackin my paper
so if u fuck with my loot dog
u dissepering like water vapor

lisen man
ill make you a missin man
with these bullet from my gun
that i hold in my hand

pretty weak.. but no worse than mine when I first started... you need to work on longer bars.. your flow's surprisingly pretty good (pro'lly from the bar length) but the vocab and content were really basic.. stay elevatin' yo.. peep others rhymes an' shit to see what they're doing and work from that... DON'T COPY THEM THO... peace