wrong time, wrong place
 

white as day in the cold dark night
fight or flight got my guts uptight
galactic arachnids,
giant dark venomous thugged out kids
holdin me down, face in the ground, lunch money all gone
i wanna scream but it just won't come out, not even a sound
bound, by the skin i'm in, my mind up above from this hell that i'm in
repeated blows to my nose pride and blood flow, red on the snow
wars waged and days saved so far away time's shaved
seconds tick by like tortoise in flight, movin backward it seems like a million bad dreams.
some one let me up for air.

this is aight after you make commas in the line those words are wack and pitaful

nice imagery....good but too simple but not in a bad way.....nice flow except for the comma breaks...well keeponit