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Where you niggaz at when I spit the heat/
Before I even flow u lower you're head in defeat/
Sickening to see you catz flow so flippn weak/
Constantly got the crowd up on their feet/
But they ain't applaudn, they ready to leave/
Like a woman u can't even get them to peak/
I take over and blaze the microphone/
Got your momma sayn "leave my son alone"/
I take no prisoners, I just slice up your throat/
You had no business rhyming, you fuckn rhyme like a joke/
I roll you out and roll you up, while lighting my next smoke/
You had to be a set-up like a fuckn UFO hoax/
There's no way you're fuckn serious, u think u can rhyme/
Rhymes so lyrically weak, for em I wouldn't pay a fuckn dime/

not ready ta battle jsut yet

thanks for the reply

i dont know i wasnt really feelin it that much...you need to work on your sentence structures and try to be a little more complex with your words...but for a newbie like myself it wasnt bad...peep out some shit i have posted in here if you dont mind and drop some feed back...keep elevating dawg...one

yeah need to brush up a little bit but get some battles goin cos thats the only was u gonna learn
u had good flow so for a real battle ur just gonna have to come with some hard punches and a bit of originality and word play
hope that helps
also peep my shit in this thread

thanks for the help ya'll...wanna spit