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Pain
This pain, this hurt
locked away in my head, Nobody knows How inside I am dead. Blood on my wrist, There is glass in my hand. Nobody knows, They cannot understand. They don't listen, So, they can't hear me cry. Nobody knows, I just wish I could die. Shaking fingers, Grasp this plea for release Nobody knows How the pain will not cease. Sadness bleeding, Emptying to the floor, Nobody knows I always craved for more, Bleeding slowly Until my wound will close, Dying slowly, Nobody knows... deseperatly holding something out of reach trying hard to figure words but theres no speech confused- the room is spinning falling on hands and knees crying uncontrollably from the inside it bleeds blackness overwhelming silence fills the air lost forever, from eyes a blank and vacent stare |
nice metaphors....the flow was aiight but why did ya change the line breaks from the middle to down?...up vocabs, try to use other figures of speech...well dont take this the wrong way..im just sayin constructive criticisms...we're all elevatin still..and im just helpin a bit...keeponit
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