Historic Rhyme *peep*
 

Hey ya'll,been a while since i posted sumthin.Aight tha thought behind dis iz I had to write sumthin for History puttin myself in the situation of a victim of Tha Holocaust..

It’s come to my attention that the situation is beyond drastic/
The sights of this horror does more than define tragic/
I wish I was deaf, so I wouldn’t hear the screams or blastin’/
Someone gets killed, they’re not worthy enough to be put in a casket/
The family has no right to bury them, or mourn through black fabrics/
And the amount of deaths is multiplying, it’s overly massive/
All you can see are piles of beaten corpses/
Germans show emotion of happiness, they don’t weep, but rejoice it/
My people need some kind of emotional and physical corroboration/
Until this is done, the Earth can’t do its proper rotation/
Our children are used as human specimen for scientific observations/
It all started because of a man who clearly lost all of his patience/
How can a nation, follow someone who practices blasphemy/
He’s practically cleared out the Jewish race, has plenty back-up, even the Japanese/
Every time I want to stand out my blood races, my heart fires/
Only thing holding me back is the heavy artillery and barbed wires/
They must think all Jews are like Jesus, giving us personal crucifixions/
I have a lot of things to say in objection but...who will listen? /
All they want to see is me stepping on a planted land mine/
The people in that sanctimonious society can’t be part of mankind/
If we believe we have the fighting power to fight these cowards/
We can reach the top, the ‘height is ours’ but maybe Eisenhower/
Can construct another plan and lead us to freedom/
Hope it’s soon, I’m running out of wounds to bleed from/
I have many scars, both physical and mental/
The soldiers beat us everyday, and believe me they’re not gentle/
I’m writing all this down hoping someone will find this paper/
Maybe it will even be published and read 30 years later/
So all can hear the story of a girl who’s life was below 3rd rank/
Everyone can know the last days of Anne Frank*

Lemme kno wut yall think.Stay ^
-Avi

shits tight mami.....concept is original ....and originality is the main artery of this shit......nice peice

fucking lovely...you the illest female mc...we gotta collb on some shit that would be hot namsayin...wordply was viscious...damn dont know what more to say...one

Thanx for tha replies ^^uppin for more
Narc,jus lemme kno if u wanna collab in a PM.Stay ^
-Avi

dayum this shit was nice as hell 4rill, nice concept,
it was easy to read, nice one, rhymed pretty good
keep blazin it

this was one of the most original
pieces I have ever read

"So all can hear the story of a girl who’s life was below 3rd rank/
Everyone can know the last days of Anne Frank"

very very clever
I loved it

p.s. peep my "7 deadly rap"
thx

hah yeah I had to do Anne Frank too, crazy shit uhh...
Nice yo, I like the way you put yourslef in their shoes and really portrayed it from a Jewish perspective, good vocab and ncie rhymin, all in all, a good drop...

Peace Out Yo!!!!

thanx for tha positive feedback yall

vocab. was through the roof....that shit was ill man
rhymes with complicated words sound the best on audio...

I’m writing all this down hoping someone will find this paper/
Maybe it will even be published and read 30 years later/

mad uppins

masterpiece :)

hey girl, shit... this was a nice ode to Ann Frank, pretty clever, nere thougth of it as something you could rap about... but you pull it off pretty well... your vocab was on point, your wordplay and vocab was strong... and the seriousness of the topic is depicted very well through your words... hot!

Peace

that was hot. I remember reading about Anne Frank in my history a few years ago... whenever... but this was ill it completely gave a mental picture of a concentration camp's horrors. Even your statement at the end rhymed with your finishing line of the verse, that just shows the flow you had going. This was amazing and deep... keep it coming

pz

.Hot Spit.
 

Hey girl, you spittin' fire ma... like those other cats said, the idea behind it was great. You did some other shit, no other m.c. has done. I'm likin' it girl... you know what you doing. Anyways, holla at me for a collabo.

i CANT say anything that the other emcees hav'ent on here....it was a ill piece mami nice usage of werds and all that bullshyt!!!!
keep doin whatcha do me'ha (mommi)
*~Holler~*

thanx yall fo realz,i appreciate tha luv.
Enigmatic,jus PM me wheneva u wanna collab aight.Stay ^
-Avi