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shorty0069 04-05-03 01:53 PM

Inside
 
Spoken into silence
and emptiness again
The words echo off my wall
into loneliness and shame.

The stillness of my being
awoken from my sleep
Finding darkness in my soul
lonely tears I weep.

Empty words of innocence
of cruelty and of shame
Crying out into the night
into loneliness again.

Painful memories so deep
and emptiness I've known
I reach for understanding
just to find that I'm alone.

Desperate cries in silence
never letting go
Wounds so deep inside me
the pain I only know.

Sadness has engulfed me
bitter to the end
Pieces of my innocence
shattered by a friend.

Inside - my innocence is lost
he took that from me -
And in this world of brokenness
there's nothing left in me.

shiznit 04-05-03 04:13 PM

hmm..strong and deep..i liked it...nice flow...weak at certain points..but its straight good...keeponit

The End 04-05-03 09:54 PM

I need to stop reading threads in this forum... everythin is too depressing in here.. lol Your poem was good though.

SmoothCrmnl 04-06-03 12:29 AM

good ish-nice flow==confusing transitions at x's (times) but all in all nice


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