A soliders prayer
 

please god hear my call
im climbin this rock, shit im bout to fall
take my hand, cause i been alone to long
dont let me be weak, please let me be strong,
teach me the diffrence beetween right and wrong
look at me tearin my hair off my head
like im livin a life but yo im already dead
ive shead so much blood
just to save the ones that i really love
i drown myself in this empty bottle
like im parked in a car, but im goin full throtul
i cant count so many times i wanted to die
sick of lifelessness,and barely gettin by
til i sit alone in the corner ,wantin to cry
yo why cant i spread my wings and just fuckin fly
in this world im a sinner, but a demon slayer
lord hear my call, a soilders prayer.........

"i drown myself in this empty bottle
like im parked in a car, but im goin full throtul"

I like the feelin in these lines
much easier to follow then ur last one too
this is not a bad deep piece
keep postin and u'll only get better

PS man this is ur
3rd thread Ive posted on
seriously check out my "7 deadly rap"
its gettin slept on
thx

thats good man
like it

i was def feelin it! good job killa! :)

ya improvin kid.....actually liked this one a lil....ya catchin my point bout comin from the heart but...learn bout some other aspects of writin and incorporate em in to your shit

So you got some new shit I havent heard yet?
this was probaly one of the best I heard from you

yo thanks 4 hittin me back keep writin, i only hope 2 do better, well peace out

soilder22