1/2 a man
 

It was like the earth twisted around her or maybe that was my opinion- the formula to love left mixed emotion and me with no dominion-
you know the routine- the love grown between-couldnt flourish with a florist so dreams- appear better then they seam-
tender moans became violent screams- proposal to marriage but she was engaged with material things-
who are you to leave and who am i for you to blame-not enough time spent cause it was the cost of survival in this game-
im yours from 5 to 9 but from 9 to 5- im the reason your still alive-
why this cable is still on- why you got your tampons-but the only finger you lift isnt to help but to tell me to fuck off-
you think i like living like this-i could give a shit- but in survival of the fittest- and a mans path needs a princess-
so from a distance - i fell in love in the instant of an instance- i caused this to happen it was my persistance-
how could it depreciate- what you never saw it there less apreciate-i played the fool while you worked him i was out working late-
im the one who overshadowed your love life- when the whole world made a whore out of my wife- sometimes love comes at a price and i cant afford it- what seams to be the light to heaven can become morbid-
or so it seams our world you painted- violated- when we made love your eve's apple left me tainted-
it's hard for not to call you a slut but what's your decision- could of been mine had i been placed in that position-
wanted to take you back in my arms-but thats the life of depression when you hurt ...you allow others to inflict harm.
past pictures make room for future pain- tattoos of tear drops make my eyes clouds for falling rain-the world without you couldnt be sustained-so i couldnt look you in your eyes just held a head in shame-

this was real coo....your vocab was on point, the usage of words was hella right this was overall a tight piece I diggs this a lot!!!
you showed hella emotion in this piece it was heartfelt I could tell, you must have went through this either recently or it was on your mind...neverthe less good werk I'm uppin this :)

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not bad.. stuck to topic, vocab was tight.. flow was consistant, not perfect tho...

"im yours from 5 to 9 but from 9 to 5- im the reason your still alive"........ that was straight, I know what that's like...

nice spit on this one cat,nice lines all round,kept it tight pretty much the whole time,peep my shit in open mic,holla back...mad nice verse man propz,feelin it...

bismillah

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