Abandoned
 

hmmm...I'm not finished this one yet, but I was just wondering how ya'll think it's going...I'm in the middle of the second verse right now...oh, and does any one know where I can find beats to use with my songs??? Just wonderin', tell me what you think and know. peaz.

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Back in eighty-six my birth mom left "me" "be"\\
Abandonned since birth, I became government "property"//
Many people felt sorry cause I was all alone you "see"\\
No father or mother, it was just "me"//
Now I look back on the crazy thought, it's "disgusting"\\
I couldn't picture doing that to no one, not in my wildest "dreams"//
Spent my first christmas in foster care, all "alone"\\
I had to wait six weeks till I had a "home"//
In a "hell hole", but I didn't know any "better"\\
Too young to even fell the rain and stormy "weather"//
If my biological parents don't want me, "then-who-does?"\\
My ma's busy drinking she's probably on the "bend-and-buzzed"//
Skipping school just like she skipped out on her "kid"\\
If I ever met her I'd question how she had the will to "live"//
A "life" of "lies", "hiding" the truth behind fifteen year old "eyes"\\
No matter how hard I "try" I can't imagine without beginning to "cry"//
I'm unwanted, not "needed", one day I'll haunt them, I mean "it"\\
She could not have "forseen it", soon I'll make her "bleed", "bitch"//
She'll regret her actions and I'll find that I was a "mistake"\\
I was at the wrong place at the wrong time, but now it's too "late"//

-hook-
Abandoned
No place to run no place to hide
Branded
A mistake, even if you try
Landed
A home of hiding feelings deep
Stranded
With nothing left that's worth to keep

-verse-
Did I inherit her eyes or maybe her just part of her "personality"//
Giving me up, I don't understand but I wish I knew the "hurt", to "see"//
How hard and painful the experience payed toll on her "life"//
To be fifteen years old with a baby, in school, how do you do "right"?//
What choice do you make when there's only a few "options"//
Give it up or abortion, she made the right choice with "adoption"//
But here I am now with no clue as to who she is and "why"//
So I sit here for hours just wondering, fuck it, I shouldn't even "try"//
All I know is she left me there in the hospital that night by "myself"//
Doing that to a 'baby', she mustv'e been 'crazy', she needs "help"//
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man nice spit! i liked your topic and the way you rhyme and flow,sounds nice...keep wrting this out foreal,will be a tight song..i aint sure about the beats though sorry,peep my song in open mic some time...holla back...nice verses foreal,i felt the hook nicely...
bismillah

Hum... I'm impressed... nice drop... Keep it up...

thanx for your two cents. I've been workin' on it for awhile, then I got a writers block and couldn't write a thing...but I picked it up again the other day and kept going. I can't wait to finish it. peaz.

uppin' for thoughts. peaz.

hey was up... hey I was feeling what you saying here... it's a deep concept and a pretty good one for a song... I don't really understand why you added those " " for, but... thas nothing...
Hey the flow in this was pretty decent, could of been better, you had pretty good rhymes... it all fit well with the concept... yeah, pretty good...

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Thanx for the comments and suggestions......peaz...

YO IM FEELIN THAT SHIT! .........LOVIN THA TITLE,I KNO THA FEELIN MANS!.............N I LOVE THA HOOK,THAS A WIKKED MANS TUNE.MUCH LOVE BLITZ!

thanx blitz. Glad to know that it's an ok drop. peaz.